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Mina Howell's avatar

Edward, this is CRAZY cool!

This is such a unique take on it, you seriously brought the big guns to this contest!

Your horror is so inspiring to me 💕

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Thank you so much. You don’t know how much I truly needed that this morning. Your support has been amazing you also inspire me in more ways than one. 🙏🙌 good luck!!!

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Mina Howell's avatar

You too my friend! 💕

I hope you're doing okay!

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Nick Buchheit's avatar

The creep is high with this one. Nice work!

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Nick Winney's avatar

very sinister... just enough exposition to make it clear whats going on... some great lines too! the collage reminded me of Gilbert and George. nice!

you got the whole thing in a very few words...great skill!

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

You’re awesome for that! Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts, always blessed when you do so 🙏

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Artemis's avatar

Wow that creeped me out. You do the narrative voice so well, it’s really what makes the piece so unsettling

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

thank you so much for reading!! 👻 you’re very appreciated

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Gabe.G Taylor's avatar

I fucking love this. Both the writing and the collage didn't have to hit so hard, but of course it did. Keep it up as always!

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Thank you! Those eyes are all apart of the same collection in the public domain archive. 👻 I appreciate your support homie

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A.D. Powers's avatar

This goes so hard. Reminds me of Reanimator 2 LOL but without the corniness of that movie, I loveeee the “there’s something fucking missing line so much” it makes me want to put myself into a coma. Fantastic job

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Wow I wasn’t sure how that one would land when I wrote it. I’m so happy you liked it! 👻

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A.D. Powers's avatar

Also, sidenote, I love the little collages you make at the beginning of your stories, I think they’re super cool

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Also! I’m always up to do one for ANYONE who’s willing to put up with some scrapped together stuff 🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🗣️🗣️🗣️🗣️

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Tamsin Gordon's avatar

Wow, this is an awesome piece. The creepy unhinged narration gave me that eerie feeling.

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Thank you! Your comment is so appreciated. I’m very glad it did what was intended!

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

I NEED to hear you read this one!

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Haha definitely debating it!! It would be perfect with audio. Thank you so much

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

It would be perfect for your 1st audio!! Dude I can hear it already, but your voice over would be the cherry on top.

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Ahh the muah at the end. Yuck! Haha I loved this piece! Very creepy and poetic. Great way to tell the story through a monologue.

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!!!🙏👁️ I’m glad you liked it

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